Open Mind: NaiSaiKu 2

Tuesday, March 16, 2010

NaiSaiKu 2

curtain-call

a clap of thunder

brings the rain

CURTAIN CALL

brings the rain
a clap of thunder

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15 COMMENTS:

Saras said...: Very nice Naisaiku! Reads well, Nalini.; March 16, 2010 at 11:02 AM
Anonymous said...: wwwooowww...
i wonder im gonna try my hands at haiku and naisaiku..
the whole syllable funda gives me creeps :(

awesome one there nalini... and here's an award for you..
:)
http://megzone.wordpress.com/2010/03/16/whiff-of-glory/; March 16, 2010 at 12:08 PM
Rajlakshmi said...: Thats a nice one. Award 4 u at my blog. :); March 16, 2010 at 12:53 PM
Andy Sewina said...: Hi Nalini, Nicely done!; March 16, 2010 at 2:24 PM
Wendy Naisa said...: Hiya, Thanks for taking the NaiSaiKu challenge?

I like the way you associated the curtain call clapping with the thunder outside, cleverly done!; March 16, 2010 at 2:28 PM
Chandni (Chanz) said...: wow... I havent even started with Haiku, and I am already hearing abt NaiSaiku...; March 16, 2010 at 2:39 PM
SandyCarlson said...: So well done. We want more!; March 16, 2010 at 3:19 PM
Stan Ski said...: It works well, but I think if you leave out the first and last line it works a little better. Either way it stays within NaiSaiKu guidelines.; March 16, 2010 at 3:25 PM
Nalini Hebbar said...: Reads better now?...thanks for the suggestion Stan; March 16, 2010 at 3:52 PM
The Analyst said...: new to Naisaiku, I am not good with poetry though, your poetry blog is amusing to read; March 16, 2010 at 6:18 PM
Rajesh said...: Beautiful composition.; March 16, 2010 at 8:37 PM
BROKEN STAR (bck agn) said...: just awesome.....grtttttt; March 16, 2010 at 9:55 PM
Tarun Mitra said...: wow....thats very goood; March 16, 2010 at 11:07 PM
robkistner said...: Enjoyed this, thank you for sharing…
…rob
Image & Verse; March 17, 2010 at 1:59 AM
Tumblewords: said...: Clever imagery! I like it...; March 18, 2010 at 9:08 AM