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Friday, March 19, 2010

Haiku 100 sardines





packed like sardines
on the suburban-
I swim out




November 24, 2009
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15 COMMENTS:

Hemanth Potluri said...

nice haiku yaar :)..

urs..hemu..

Farila said...

Sardines.. LOL.. only these smell of sweat.

Matty said...

That's a real good description of the subway. Nice job.

♥ Braja said...

Fantastic image, Nalini...yours?

I've only ever written Japanese Haiku, and like it's rhythm and consistency more than "English Haiku," which is an adaptation of the original and I think loses something...but the elments of opposed elements exists, and that's the cool thing about Haiku

Parth J Dave said...

Very well done, Nalini!

The methaphorical effect in this Haiku is just awesome....!

Sayed said...

Superb Pic..

noni said...

nice blog..pics and your writing..
loves your haiku creations

karan a said...

The pic is just amazing!

manjujoglekar said...

The picture and the verse go very nicely together!

bollywoodstylediaries said...

I dont think I can eat sardines again!!

nice haiku!!

sonali
http://bollywoodstylediaries.blogspot.com

Tulika said...

woaah..!

Great one. :)

megzone said...

lolz... wattay comparison with Sardines.. but take it from me who travels in trains daily... u are bang on target.. it is indeed like a pack of sardines.. each waiting to swim out at the earliest possible way...
awesome Haiku as always :)

Shail said...

Indeed, packed like sardines! :)

Nashsingh said...

Very elegant!

Nethra said...

Sardines stink, don't they?
I have never been in train.