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Tuesday, May 18, 2010

My first Short Story



This is the first time I am writing prose. And it has turned out to be a rather long short story.


I got the first line in my head 3 days ago and I pulled out my golden diary to jot down my sentence. To my surprise, within minutes I was writing out  the story and character sketch. It took an hour for the story to extend itself...yes, I swear it did...all by itself!


I hope its readers will help me with criticism. I do need it to improve with the editing and maybe with the extension of some scenes.

Hope Diamond

11 COMMENTS:

magiceye said...

an excellent attempt!

magiceye said...

cannot seem to find your email id to mail you my critical analysis. you may mail it to me if you wish at blownmagic@yahoo.co.in

Lazy Pineapple said...

very nice story Nalini :) you have woven the story really well...

karan a said...

Havent read it completely, found it interesting but will complete it in time and then comment as a whole! But seriously a very good attempt!

PS: An award is awaiting for you at my blog! Congratulations!

Tarun Mitra said...

Hey an award for you in my blog :)

Hari said...

I enjoyed reading it. I actually had the fortune of seeing the real Hope Diamond on a recent visit to Washington DC.

karan a said...

I cannot express in words the feeling I have after reading the story! The feeling you have after a movie is over, subtitles are rolling and you are just filled with "wow, that was brilliant!"


An amazing one... As you move from paragraph to paragraph the depth increases. The detailing of characters is fantastic. One story leading to another, a complex story yet narrated so simply. Hatsoff to your creation. While reading a lot of times it crossed to my minds that this story can be adapted into a two hrs movie.

I loved it!

wanderer said...

YOu got a surprise waiting for you in my blog

http://wanderer-onestep.blogspot.com/2010/05/award-after-long-hiatus.html.

Nalini Hebbar said...

Thanks a lot Karan, Hari, Deepak and L Pine...very encouraged by your comments...and the help in editing(Deepak) and the suggestions(Karan)were particularly very useful and generous.
and thanks Karan and Tarun for the awards...I have put them up in my Awards page...but please forgive me for not passing them on...we have a cyclone raging outside and our transformer is having a fireworks show of its own!

Lalit S Chowdhary said...

It was more than one story. In fact every character had a story to tell. What becomes of Vikram?

Rajendra Raikwar said...

Very nice