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Wednesday, April 7, 2010

Dreamer- Rictameter Verse

Like the Cinquain, the Rictameter has a two syllable increment with each line, and a two syllable closure. However, unlike the Cinquain, the Rictameter does not stop at eight, it continues with a line of ten syllables, and instead of a two syllable closure, it decreases each line by two syllables per line until the closure. The closure being a repeat of the first line, so it is advisable to make it eye catching and definitive. The syllable count is as follows- 2R.4.6.8.10.8.6.4.2R.
 


Dreamer, 
You I salute,
 
Into lands you venture
Where no answers follow questions,
 
Where questions as two-tongued as
 vipers are
Whispered in rapid succession
As you hover wide-eyed
In ether land,
 
Dreamer.

Dreamer,
 
You I salute,
 
Into hearts you venture
With coy ease, prevail forever
With poems that smile through anguish and tears,
 
Leading you gently on tiptoes
Into his unique world
In ether land
Dreamer.



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12 COMMENTS:

magiceye said...

beautiful!

Lazy Pineapple said...

simply wonderful :)

Farila said...

I love the way you have shaped your words in this poem... Lovely

Journomuse said...

wow, symmetrically lyrical...and awesome way to condense thoughts...:)

Swapnali said...

Very interesting indeed! Cheers.

Nalini Hebbar said...

Thanks guys...I love all your comments.

Shilpa said...

lovely :)

D2 said...

Beautiful poem.
And more so for me because I love symmetry!
I've never come across such a style of writing.
:)

Mr. A. said...

amazingly beautiful.... hats off for this wonderful poem...

Chandrama said...

Beautifully composed. Smartly structured. read a lot of your poems. Loved them all. Salute to the writer in you. God Bless!

Rajendra Raikwar said...

very nice

Enigmatic Soul said...

Absolutely brilliant. Its always difficult to write poems with restricted specific structures but your piece flows along with such ease and flow. Beautiful imagery.